Television
An Essay on Friendship
By: Jake DeLapp
Pine Point School
Eighth Grade A English
In many ways friendship is more than friendship itself. It can be compared to so many different things and explained a variety of different ways. I think that companionship is a lot like a TV and a remote because, for one, a television and a remote go together perfectly. If you look at an actual TV and an actual remote you notice that TV’s always have, or come, with remotes. I think that I could compare myself to the TV because I am incondite without my remote, the device that guides me, helps me choose which way to go, giving me hope in the hardest times. I also think that TV’s and remotes are a lot like companionship because the remote guides the TV. In real life the remote is whets telling the TV to change channels, go down a different path or even shut down. This is like friendship because if you are the TV and the remote is your friend, your friends, or remotes, are always bolstering you out in life and making sure you head down the right path. Finally there’s the fact that a TV would be nothing without a remote. If you had a TV without a remote you wouldn’t be able to change channels and you might be watching the food network all day long. In friendship if you’re the TV that’s lost its remote or friend you suddenly find it a lot harder to do accustomed things without your remote and it’s certainly not as enjoyable. If I look at companionship I can always see a lot more
than just a bond itself.
TV’s and remotes are literally meant for each other, whereas my friends and I are made for each other. My friends always help me out and make my life better. My mates also help me out when times are hard and I need to talk to someone or have someone to talk to. Friendship is basica
Dear Jake,
ReplyDeleteYou should take a few minutes and read your first paragraph out loud and see if you can rework it because if you did it would be much clearer, for example. Instead of saying "My remotes are what guides and helps me along life." you might want to say my remotes are what guide and help me along in life" because this seems to flow much smoother than what you have written. I really liked how for the past essay you did TVs and for this essay you are doing TVs. Lastly for your loose sentence you didn't underline the whole sentence. Other than these mistakes I would read over your essay a few more times and polish completely.
Gaelen