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Thursday, November 18, 2010

Essay #8

 
 Lies and Loneliness
An essay on loneliness
By: Jake DeLapp
Pine Point 8A English
November 2010
        Loneliness is really just a lesser form of depression, and everyone suffers from it. When you are feeling abandoned, you obviously are sad, I don’t know anyone that would rather be alone then with friends. Although no one likes to be lonely it happens to everyone, you can't escape it completely. Even the most popular people, or even characters from books, TV or movies suffer from loneliness as well and I can assure you that they hate it just as much as you or me.
        In To Kill a Mockingbird Dill,
the boy with kind, loving, cool parents, family and friends feels lonely. In To Kill a Mockingbird we find out that Dills life and parents aren’t what we thought. His parents avoid him, and when he’s not with Jem and Scout, his life is actually very isolated. Dill even said “he-they just wasn’t interested in me” which just proves that Dills parents weren’t who he depicted them to be. Because Dill felt very alone he made up illusory stories about his parents and many other things. One time Dill actually said that his father ran a railroad and that on his way to Maycomb he helped out on the tracks, which we later learn is not true at all. I believe Dill lies because he doesn’t want Jem, Scout, Atticus or others to think Dill lives his life in complete solitude, he might think that if they know he is a loner they wont like him. I believe Dill is right to feel alone and make up lies like he did, if I were in his shoes I would do the same thing.

        alghough i have many kind, compassionate friends, I often feel lonely. I may be doing something as simple as doing homework or reading when I start to feel desolate. I start to think about all my friends and how much fun I could be having with them, and wish I was with them at that very moment. Although my friends certainly aren’t abandoning me I cant help but to feel isolated. I often try to avoid the feeling of solitude by texting my friends or talking on the phone, but that forlorn feeling never departs me completely. I am not a loner, but at times I cant help feeling    as though I am an outcast.        
        In actuality no one wants to feel isolated and lonely. Lots of people may seem like they want to feel lonely but it's just because they feel rejected. In lots of movies and TV shows you will see a grumpy old man that seems like he’s angry at the world and doesn't want anything to do with anyone, but in the end you always find out that it's not the truth and that they really do enjoy company. Sometime in life you may meet one of these characters who are just suffering from loneliness, and when you do think about what loneliness feels like and offer to spend time with them and cure them of their loneliness.        Although I have many kind and       

2 comments:

  1. Dear Jake,
    Great job so far on your essay! I like your second paragraph because it is really detailed, and the F.A.S.T words just make the paragraph even better. However in your sentence, “Although my friends certainly aren’t abandoning me I cant help but to feel isolated.” I think you need a comma between me and I because if you read the sentence out loud you can here a pause in there, which means a comma should be present. Also, in your first two sentences of your essay you repeat yourself with “In To Kill a Mockingbird” and all that I would suggest doing is finding some other word, or phrase that you could replace your second In To Kill a Mockingbird with. Nice work Jake!

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  2. Dear Jake,
    When I started reading this post on loneliness i loved all of your FAST words, especially illusory. I thought that word fit very well. I noticed that you did not have apostrophes like here "we find out that Dills life and parents" and "which just proves that Dills parents weren’t who he depicted" If you put an apostrophe there that would be fantastic. Another thing that i noticed was that you need a space between these words "compassionatefriends" Lastly you could bold "abandoning" and "loner" Great job Jake.

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