Essay #8

　
　Lies and Loneliness
An essay on loneliness
By: Jake DeLapp
Pine Point 8A English
November 2010
        Loneliness is really just a lesser form of depression, and everyone suffers from it. When you are feeling abandoned, you obviously are sad, I don’t know anyone that would rather be alone then with friends. Although no one likes to be lonely it happens to everyone, you can't escape it completely. Even the most popular people, or even characters from books, TV or movies suffer from loneliness as well and I can assure you that they hate it just as much as you or me.
        In To Kill a Mockingbird Dill, the boy with kind, loving, cool parents, family and friends feels lonely. In To Kill a Mockingbird we find out that Dills life and parents aren’t what we thought. His parents avoid him, and when he’s not with Jem and Scout, his life is actually very isolated. Dill even said “he-they just wasn’t interested in me” which just proves that Dills parents weren’t who he depicted them to be. Because Dill felt very alone he made up illusory stories about his parents and many other things. One time Dill actually said that his father ran a railroad and that on his way to Maycomb he helped out on the tracks, which we later learn is not true at all. I believe Dill lies because he doesn’t want Jem, Scout, Atticus or others to think Dill lives his life in complete solitude, he might think that if they know he is a loner they wont like him. I believe Dill is right to feel alone and make up lies like he did, if I were in his shoes I would do the same thing.
        alghough i have many kind, compassionate friends, I often feel lonely. I may be doing something as simple as doing homework or reading when I start to feel desolate. I start to think about all my friends and how much fun I could be having with them, and wish I was with them at that very moment. Although my friends certainly aren’t abandoning me I cant help but to feel isolated. I often try to avoid the feeling of solitude by texting my friends or talking on the phone, but that forlorn feeling never departs me completely. I am not a loner, but at times I cant help feeling    as though I am an outcast.        
        In actuality no one wants to feel isolated and lonely. Lots of people may seem like they want to feel lonely but it's just because they feel rejected. In lots of movies and TV shows you will see a grumpy old man that seems like he’s angry at the world and doesn't want anything to do with anyone, but in the end you always find out that it's not the truth and that they really do enjoy company. Sometime in life you may meet one of these characters who are just suffering from loneliness, and when you do think about what loneliness feels like and offer to spend time with them and cure them of their loneliness.        Although I have many kind and       

graphic organizer; essay #8

Main Point or Thesis of Essay = loneliness
Bell word = lonely
Paragraph 1 -- Opening
Hook = everyone is lonely sometimes
Comment on the hook = friends aren’t with you all the time
Comment on the hook = even when your with people you might miss someone else and feel lonely
Thesis (with bell word) = nobody is never lonelyParagraph 2
TS (Main Idea, Topic, or Thesis) = In TKAM Dill feels lonely
2 Echo words to be used = alone, isolated
SD = “that wasn’t is, he-they just wasn’t interested in me”
CM = parents didn’t want him
CM = Dill felt very alone
SD = “well they stayed gone all the time, and when they were home, even, they’d get off in a room by themselves”
CM = Dill felt like he wasn’t wanted
CM = because he felt alone he made up lies (what he did over summer etc.)
CS =
Paragraph 3
TS (Main Idea, Topic, or Thesis) = many people are lonely
2 Echo words to be used = solitary, desolate
SD = I see lots of people alone
CM = there everywhere (school, sports etc)
CM = seem to wander around by themselves
SD = I don’t think anyone should be lonely all the time
CM = friends are great and everybody should have them
CM = how would you feel if you were lonely all the time
CS = help lonely people out.
Paragraph 4
Hook (the same as paragraph 1, or different) = everyones lonely some times
Echo word (could be bell word) = unnacompanied
Comment on the hook = maybe your away on vacation
Comment on the hook = maybe your friends are made at you
Re-statement, in slightly different words, of the thesis = nobody should live in isolation

Transformations

An Essay on Changing

By; Jake DeLapp

Pine Point 8A English

11/4/10       

         Nobody ever stays the same. In my whole life I haven’t met anyone that hasn’t changed physically or mentally. Nobody stays in baby form or thinks like a baby their whole life. As you grow up you’re basically transforming and changing from your previous self.
        In TKAM we start to see Jem changing. He’s obviously not the same person he was in the beginning of the book mentally. He no longer plays childish games with scout. He also spends more time alone reading in his room or just chilling out, whereas before he always was having fun with scout and fooling around. We are starting to see that Jem is no longer a young boy. In the beginning of the book he appeared to be a child, but now he appears to be a young man. Jem is obviously not the character we used to know.
        In many ways I am changing as well. I don’t goof around like I used to, I am no longer found playing with action figures or other toys I used when I was younger. Instead you may find me playing sports, doing homework or skateboarding. I am also mush smarter and more serious. My intelligence has definitely altered since kindergarten, I now understand things that I didn’t think were even possible to understand when I was younger. I am also, obviously, not the same physically as I was many years ago. I am certainly not the same size, and not nearly as weak. I also can do things like shooting a three pointer, which I could never do before. Shooting a three pointer or kicking a soccer ball a far distance was something that I looked up to middle schoolers in amazement for being able to do. I’m also not the only one that’s changed, everyone around me has changed and are changing as we speak.
        Everyone we know has probably changed since you first met them. You probably have as well. Your not the same puny five year old you used to be. You probably don’t play with toddlers toys either. In the end everybody changes, nobody stays the same.

graphic organizer-growing up essay

Main Point or Thesis of Essay = as you grow up you change in many ways
Bell word = change

Paragraph 1 -- Opening
Hook = adults never the same as when they were 3
Comment on the hook = Change mentally
Comment on the hook = change physically
Thesis (with bell word) = as you grow up you morph
Paragraph 2
TS (Main Idea, Topic, or Thesis) = In TKAM jem start to change
2 Echo words to be used = transformation, modification
SD = grows up mentally
CM = doesn’t play childish games
CM = spends more time alone
SD = not a boy anymore
CM = child in start of book, progressed as book comes along
CM = becoming his own person
CS = not the character we used to know

Paragraph 3
TS (Main Idea, Topic, or Thesis) = I’m also growing up
2 Echo words to be used = alteration, ammendment
SD = not childish anymore
CM = don’t play games
CM = much smarter and more serious
SD = not the same physically
CM = much taller and stronger
CM = do stuff never could before
CS = everyone changes
Paragraph 4
Hook (the same as paragraph 1, or different) = nobody stays the same
Echo word (could be bell word) = adjustment
Comment on the hook = change mentally
Comment on the hook = change physically
Re-statement, in slightly different words, of the thesis = as you grow up you change in many ways